Continuous Writing: Creative Writing II
In our previous lesson, we discussed the features of a story and you were assigned to write a story that ends with the words: “Had I known, I wouldn’t have believed him.” Compare your composition with the following model essay.
This story of mine is directed at the young women who fall into the arms of some callous and shallow – minded men who promise them heaven and earth in order to get in between their legs. This is a true – life experience that I would like to share with our young and unsuspecting ladies.
I graduated from the University of Benin in 1999 with a second class honours degree in Physics. During my undergraduate years, I was never involved with the opposite sex. My mother had strictly warned me against having an affair with any man so that I wouldn’t get pregnant or contract any of the sexually transmitted diseases that are rampant nowadays.
My ordeal started when I received my National Youth Service Corps (NYSC) call-up letter. I was posted to Zamfara State. When I received the letter, I was downcast. I had hoped that I would be posted to Lagos. Notwithstanding, I resolved to get a redeployment to Lagos. I raised some money and travelled to Abuja to effect the redeployment. Today, I still regret making that journey to Abuja for it marked a turning point in my young life.
When I got to Abuja, I went straight to the NYSC headquarters. There, I met a ravishingly handsome young man who sympathized with my plight and took it upon himself to help me out. He introduced himself to me as Michael, a senior administrative officer at the NYSC headquarters. For four days, Mike worked very hard to get the redeployment papers ready. On the fifth day, however, he offered to take me out for lunch. I did not find it difficult to accept his offer. You see, I had started to feel some kind of sensation, some warmth, some closeness toward Mike, which I had never felt for any man before.
At the Rendezvous Restaurant where we went for lunch, Mike was very kind and gentle to me. He told me how much he loved me and how intensely he desired to have me as his wife. He asked me whether I would marry him. How could I say no? It is the dream of every young woman to get married to the man she loves. For me, I had really fallen in love with Mike and I didn’t hesitate to accept his offer of marriage. And so I was redeployed, not to Lagos but to Abuja. Mike later introduced me to his parents as his fiancée. Before I knew it, one thing followed another. I especially enjoyed the moments I spent alone with Mike. We began to make love on a daily basis, I threw all caution to the wind.
One day, I woke up in the morning and felt nauseated. I thought it was the symptom of malaria and so I went to a clinic within the vicinity. The doctor ran some tests and then the result … I was two weeks pregnant. I felt both excited and apprehensive, excited because I was going to be a mother, apprehensive because I was unsure what Mike’s reaction would be. I waited until he came home that night and I broke the news to him. He stared at me for some three minutes. Then he asked me: “Is it a joke or what?” “I’m not joking. This is the result of the test I did.” I held out the paper to him. “Then I have nothing to do with your pregnancy! What do you take me for? A fool? After sleeping around with countless men, you want to foist your pregnancy on me. I thought you were different. I should have known that all you young girls are the same – cheap harlots!” I stood there as if transfixed, watching Mike in utter disbelief.
The next morning Mike moved out of my flat. Before he left however, he strictly warned me never to get in touch with him any more. I thought I was dreaming. Sadly, I wasn’t. Today, I am the mother of a bastard. I had fallen for the cheapest trick of men. Often, I tell myself ‘Had I known, I wouldn’t have believed him.’
Read through the story carefully and criticize it in terms of its compliance with the conventions of the short story.
1. Oral English Without Tears by I. Udoka
2. New Oxford Secondary English Course for SS 2 by Ayo Banjo et al
3. Intensive English for SS 2 by Benson O. Oluikpe et al
4. School Certificate English Language by I. Udoka